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Your Mulberry Road By: Ben C on 10/30/2003; 2:16 PM Floating down your street Walk through your door I’ll breath a breath
of relief This far Fell into a haunt You fell into a haunt You fell into a Skyline Fell into a haunt &
RE: Your Mulberry Road By: Guillaume R. Cingal on 11/24/2003; 5:03 PM This poem has a brilliant and burning nucleus (roughly lines 13 to 24) that irradiates beauty and mystery well into the first and last stanzas. I am not too sure about the last lines, though.
RE: Your Mulberry Road By: Ben C on 11/28/2003; 8:08 AM Mr. Cingal, (if that's your real name!) I think you've given too much credit to the middle of the poem, which I don't think is really that special. Therefore the ending is automatically a lesser one. PS, However, I'd be curious to see what you change about the ending, having given up on this one altogether myself. Seriously, Ben T. Costen
RE: Your Mulberry Road By: Guillaume R. Cingal on 11/30/2003; 3:49 PM That's: my real name. That's: an embarrassing question, as I am pretty sure I have no suggestions. That's: always difficult to comment upon without being harsh with. That was: an almost ungrammatical third point. Those were: my non-replies. Yet, I'll think it over!!!
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