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Sick of Poetry By: Richard Davidson on 9/18/2003; 6:59 PM Words splashed on a dirty wall Dripping, taunting, oozing Rank emotion, ten feet tall Meaning of your choosing Blood dript on a sterile page Spreading, seeping, creeping Raw energy, filled with rage Dormant conscience sleeping How dare you fill my heart And head with better nonsense Than adverbs I have blown apart On napkins at Howard Johnson's Sounds jabbered into the night Making ears burn freely Babbling, and feeling right When you're no Horace Greeley Shut up! Shut up! Your senseless moans Grab me by the scrotum Squeeze hard, and elicit groans Aren't you sorry that you wrote 'em?
RE: Sick of Poetry By: R.A.B. on 9/19/2003; 8:09 AM The wit of Richard Davidson and his fine choice of deranged vocabulary is as usual what shines in this poem. Ah Richard I honor you with a toast of Lard extracted from my pet black pig Pricky!
RE: Sick of Poetry By: Ben C on 9/21/2003; 3:13 PM Yes, I'm very sorry. Will you ever forgive me, man?
RE: Sick of Poetry By: David Loredo on 10/19/2003; 12:52 PM I actually think if this guy would expierience more of life and got his thoughts straight he could actually right exelent poetry, and after isnt that what most poety is? appearence? But then again the worlds best writters worry about the messege their getting accross and not about using fancy words that only half of the people who read what theyve written understand. "Ah Richard I honor you with a toast of Lard extracted from my pet black pig Pricky!" dude... was that supposed to be funny?
RE: Sick of Poetry By: David Loredo on 10/19/2003; 12:53 PM and ben.. im having a hard time believing that you have "coworkers" act your age man... i mean come on responding to a retorical question of a poem?
RE: Sick of Poetry By: Rachelle King on 10/19/2003; 9:45 PM "The wit of Richard Davidson and his fine choice of deranged vocabulary is as usual what shines in this poem. Ah Richard I honor you with a toast of Lard extracted from my pet black pig Pricky!" I concur! I also think Loredo should lighten up a bit. HI ALL!!! Does anyone remember me? It has been a while. Richard, Oh, how these line brings back memories: "Than adverbs I have blown apart On napkins at Howard Johnson's." We used to sit around at Denny's till three o'clock in the am passing a napkin back and forth over cold french fries and melted milk shakes.
RE: Sick of Poetry By: Ben C on 10/20/2003; 9:31 AM Got me there man, I shouldn't have responded to a rhetorical question. Because that's Lame, right? What do you think's more of a giveaway... 1. My ability to spell correctly most of the time. or 2. Responding to a)silly poems and b)your crazy replies.
RE: Sick of Poetry By: R.A.B. on 10/20/2003; 10:54 AM Yeo Loredo what the hell is your problem? If you think it's not funny then shut up.It's not for you anyway. Oh and by the way what's this about Richard Davidson needing to experience more in life? For goodness' sake he's a middle aged adult. You probably don't even have 1/20th of the experiences he's had.
RE: Sick of Poetry By: Mark Morgan on 10/20/2003; 11:51 AM David, what does it take to get through to you? Stop telling people you're not going to take them seriously, stop calling these discussions "boring", stop telling them their topics are dumb. If you have constructive feedback give it. I didn't create Unreason as a place for you to tear people down. In case you missed my other introduction, I'm the owner of this here website and I'm the one who will dump everything you've written to the Bleachers if you don't cut it out right now. Seriously. Why so hostile? In another thread Ben C asked: "[I]f someone posts something on VoU, then should it be open to blatant fun making?, such as in this case... it was up to Gene to post whatever he posted, he did not have to post it, if someone reads a post... should they not be allowed to react honestly (with the reasonable exception to defamation of character and blathering (which I am imminently in danger of committing)) to the posted poem/piece?" I'm all for open and honest feedback. If I write something that sucks someone should tell me. But is it enough to just say "dude, you suck, get some more experience before writing again" and nothing else? We're all writers with enormous, yet fragile egos. It takes a certainly kind of courage mixed with a dash of insanity to post something as intimate as our feelings on a website for the whole world to look at and judge. It is our responsibility as readers to be honest with our feelings without being hostile, without being mean, without dragging the names of others into the mud. Again, David, why so hostile? Is there nothing here you've read that you actually like? A little sugar with the salt would go a long way.
RE: Sick of Poetry By: Richard Davidson on 10/20/2003; 7:50 PM David: Oh yeah? Ben: I enjoyed your response to my rhetorical question, and saw it as a humorous example of a person taking responsibility. I considered it a fairly brilliant post. I'm glad you jabbed David on his spelling, saving me the trouble. RAB: I thought your Pet Pig Prickey was a fine example of a surrealistic image, that fits the overall flavor of my writing, and is a fitting tribute. Rachelle: I actually did more of my writing at the counter at Perkins, but Perkins didn't rhyme there, so I used HJ's, which I have eaten at more than once, but it was some time ago, and I think it was bland Turkey Loaf and Mashed Potatoes, or some such crap. Mark: You're right to thump on old Dave here, but I have to point out that David picked the right guy to harrass. As you all know, my ego knows no bounds, and I consider myself a very unique, and interesting writer. When I want to be "serious," I think I can be quite good, but I really am not disposed to that type of work anymore, perhaps because I don't take ANYTHING very seriously anymore. This poem, as an ANTI-Poem, with a humorous tilt, is a very nice piece of work. Is it perfect? It must be, because I never went back and edited it, and I am not lazy, as you all know. Thank you all for participating in my thread, and as I mentioned, I think Ben put a nice perspective on just how much credence we have to give a guy like Dave. David, I extend you an invitation. Instead of coming on here and attacking everybody, why not write a nice poem, or song, or opera, or something?
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