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Sands in the Snow By: Gene Santos on 5/20/2003; 9:35 AM your shadow appeared across the gutter,,, and opened the gate of this house you once closed it seemed ages since i've seen your picturesque beauty is it still unseen by anyone but me,inside your smile discrepancy... you opened the door,and dropped your bags on the floor... should i be surprised with your coming? there's something in the air that's changing our atmosphere must be hatred and disgrace... but how can't i be happy with you right now? because you're over there when i need you here... i hope the time has not change you... i think you're too late... those three words are too late... you are too late,,, because i have nothing to feel for you no more... people change my dear...forgive my indecision,,, i am only a man... you never heed my call... all i really want was for you to stay...
RE: Sands in the Snow By: R.A.B. on 5/20/2003; 9:51 AM Hmmm... a love poem. A little more of internal rhyme and some regular form of rhythm should make this more appealing to the reader's eyes, other than that this is a fine poem. Anyway I guess it's just my own writing style that's reflecting on this critique of mine so do what you think soothes your taste here.
RE: Sands in the Snow By: Gene Santos on 5/20/2003; 9:55 AM woah...thanks...actually,its a love and lost poem..."ewan ko ba,lahat ng nangyari sakin di ko matiis isulat"...
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