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ROYGBIV By: R.A.B. on 2/21/2003; 8:08 AM ROYGBIV, I saw above; In this translucent sky I learned to love, This majestic beauty shows! Thru trickling droplets and golden rays combined- this ruby of the sky came to be. The only thing I'm wond'ring of is why, This godly sight forms a sulk?
RE: ROYGBIV By: Chie Theresa Fujioka on 2/22/2003; 9:06 AM I like the idea of this poem: the parallel of a rainbow to a "sulk" is something I never considered before. However, I am crestfallen at the plethora of technical language, verses more imagery. I realize that this is simply my own writing preference showing through, and so understand that I am not criticising you for this. It reflects my preference for the beautiful, the surreal, and the austere to compose art, and the strong bold technical science and mathematics to be contained in essays and satrical pieces. And yet, as I reread it, I see very little technical words... perhaps I am frustrated at the language which says to my mind, but does not speak to my eyes. But then, I also see language like this in famous writers... not my favorites, but still. Your poem is a piece well written that I wish to appreciate.
RE: ROYGBIV By: R.A.B. on 2/22/2003; 5:05 PM I'm just trying to establish my poetic identity that's why I am experimenting with different stuff. I admire the comment thanks, it's a constructive form of criticism I know so thanks. By the way I did use literary allusions for some lines, great that you have noticed.
RE: ROYGBIV By: Daryl Del Rosario on 2/27/2003; 3:26 AM Dude, next year, 2nd Sem, our Major's gonna be Fiction Writing... Poetry on 1st Sem too... It was so hot today, I almost passed out from the heat, pfeh, I wish we had four seasons here... Maybe it makes you sulk coz it reminds you of being teased by the others (including me)...
RE: ROYGBIV By: R.A.B. on 2/27/2003; 3:43 AM Ha and the sunrises at last on our damned college life. finaly a major subject worth our while. Anyway, I just tried to show here that behind any beautiful thing there is still an imperfection.
RE: ROYGBIV By: Daryl Del Rosario on 2/27/2003; 3:51 AM The only perfect thing is imperfection... *sigh*
RE: ROYGBIV By: R.A.B. on 2/27/2003; 4:03 AM That's a cliche you know, anyway it's a cliche because it's true.
RE: ROYGBIV By: Daryl Del Rosario on 2/27/2003; 4:07 AM Yes it is, but it is true after all... Hmm, any form of enlightenment on e.e. cummings' poem? I just posted Frozen Cycle...
RE: ROYGBIV By: R.A.B. on 2/27/2003; 6:11 AM The poem "l(a" is the product of ingenuity. e e cummings pulled off the structuralization of that poem and passed it with flying colors.
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