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Madness By: Daryl Del Rosario on 11/22/2002; 7:37 AM It springs forth From the back Of my mind Screaming It drives me To the brink Of insanity Crying It makes me Lose myself From within Laughing It carries me off To the darkness Of my soul Weeping Now its a part of me Melded to me And as one, we are Smiling
RE: Madness By: Richard Davidson on 11/23/2002; 1:03 PM That is a truly beautiful poem. In the first stanza, I think to myself, "oh geez, here we go again, yet another poem about the first subject anyone ever writes about. Probably will be hackneyed, and filled with cliches. I really don't want to like this at all." The second stanza makes me think I am definately headed down the hallway to my own insanity, driven mad from all the wannabe poets of the world. I'm especially disturbed to see the concept of "madness driving one to the brink of insanity," as it is redundant, and thus muddled. In the third, I am suddenly less comfortable being a cynical critic, because the notion of losing oneself from within, laughing is not only highly pleasing to me, but an idea that I strongly feel needs to be expressed. Suddenly I wonder if my criticisms of the first two stanzas are a bit harsh, and perhaps merely yet another manifestation of my abhorrent, self-indulgent personality coming through once again. And the fourth is just fine, giving the poem the correct amount of melancholy in just the right place, making me feel kind of bad for having made an ass of myself back there. But if the poem had ended there, I still might have been able to easily dismiss it, and go on about my merry way, but of course, it doesn't, and in the final stanza, I suddenly find the best advice I've ever read about how to survive. And then I immediately forgive myself for all that nonsense at the beginning of this, and say to myself, "I simply must thank the poet for the hope." Thanks for the hope, Daryl. Great poem.
RE: Madness By: Evan on 11/24/2002; 1:38 AM I really like this poem, I'm a big fan of madness. I believe that all the politicians should be locked up in the asylum and all the madmen allowed to run the world, (well them the dolphins and the chimpanzees). Its a very good description, my mind does the whole bouncing up down and all around thing too.
RE: Madness By: Andrew Guerrero on 12/2/2002; 5:18 AM Well looks like you've done good this time Daryl. What would the Girl from Commerce think about this? =)
RE: Madness By: Daryl Del Rosario on 12/3/2002; 4:46 AM The question would first probably be... Does she know I exist??? The second: Does she read poems and other literature??? Third: Would she think that this poem is for her??? Because its not... Fourth would be for you: Were you "high" when you replied???
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