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puff By: Chie Theresa Fujioka on 4/11/2002; 8:18 AM the small girl walks secnad yob dliw eht amid wildflowers seton egnarts gnirumrum with bouquet of clouds hsurc ot meht skcip on bright green stems dniw eht no rettacs dna
RE: puff By: Alex Mckey on 4/11/2002; 6:22 PM i had to look at it for a minute to figure ou you wrote backwards. way cool. i'll try later to read the rest. back to my stupid research paper. i wnat to write poetry not a stinking paper. catch you later.
RE: puff By: Dorothy Marie on 4/11/2002; 7:11 PM thinking outside the box. that's one of the things i always loved about you, ChI. =)
RE: puff By: Chie Theresa Fujioka on 4/13/2002; 8:19 AM hehehe danke dot. do you know what it's about?
RE: puff By: Eoghainn Oniongardail on 4/14/2002; 10:28 AM Very good, Chie! This one reminds me somewhat of the e.e. cummings poem, "Old Age Sticks" in it's circular contrast. Is it a dandilion?
RE: puff By: Richard Davidson on 4/14/2002; 9:17 PM Hey, did anybody else notice that when the line doubles back, it tends to turn dark? The small girl walks - all is fine, and sunny; we are comfortable in our world The wild boy dances (backwards) - perhaps some sort of threat is implied in the boy's abandon? Perhaps not. Amid wildflowers - Aah, the serenity. The warm sun caresses my smiling young face... Murmuring strange notes (backwards) - This line is definately unsettling. The wildflowers are murmuring strange notes? The dancing wild boy is? The walking girl? I don't know, but the whole thing is definately starting to freak me out. I'm guessing the girl is walking a bit faster at this point, her heart racing, wondering what that sick, diseased dancing FREAK is going to do next... With bouquet of clouds - Whew! Thank God for some nice, benign cloud images. Thank you Chie, I was getting a bit upset... Picks them to crush (backwards again) OK, now this is just reinforcing what I was talking about. This bastard is going to magically "pick some clouds," and then CRUSH THEM!!!!????? AUGH!!! AAAAAUUUUUUGGGGGHHHHH!!!!! Somebody get me an injection, somebody HELP ME!!!!!! On bright green stems - well, isn't that nice. Nice, bright, green, oh so soothing. Thank you Dr. for the pretty green stems. They are nice. Everything is so nice. You are nice. And scatter on the wind (backwards) - OK, well that's not as dark as any of the other backwards lines, I'll admit that, because now we have some semblance of perspective on the nature of life, death and dying. I feel OK with this line, and wonder why Chie has decided to let up on our suffering at this point. Perhaps she seeks to leave us feeling OK, so she can come back another day and dig DEEP INTO OUR PSYCHES, but there is a note of sadness at the destruction of these flowers, so perhaps she has only left a small hint of pain, as opposed for going in for the kill. Chie, how'd I do? By the way, brilliant, as always. I don't pay much attention to you most of the time, as I don't like you. Just kidding; it's really that I'm afraid you'll get a swelled ego, like myself. And there's only room for ONE ego that size on this HYAR site!
RE: puff By: Chie Theresa Fujioka on 4/15/2002; 5:23 AM lol richard Yes, it is a dandelion. I was sitting at the train station one day after school. I had picked a dendelion puff for yuji and we were watching the seeds sweep across the platform from the wind. Two children were playing in the grass, and I remarked how curious it was that the girl was making a bouquet of the puffs, and the boy was jumping around, humming a tune-less tune, picking the stems and crushing the puff. At first the thing was two stanzas... but I was tired of that. So I just mixed the lines. Then I thought that since the two ideas were exactly opposite, like yin and yang, I ought to make them opposte. In japanese, the writing direction doesn't matter, but in English, the backwards-ness may convey wrongness, or disorder. So I tried to make each boy-line chaotic, wild, or dark, while the girl's was bright, orderly, and soothing... I still don't like it quite tho. The girl's lines are rhythmmically chaotic, which doesn't help the pattern...
RE: puff By: lindsay on 4/16/2002; 4:48 PM Very ineresting. that's a cool way to do that. tsrif ta egaugnal dreiw emos saw ti thguoht I but realized it was backwards. Very interesting
RE: puff By: Zares Kurtoga on 4/16/2002; 7:01 PM Yeah, I thought it was some weird language too.Stupid people unite. Kaj
ffup :ER By: Evan on 4/17/2002; 10:41 AM ?sdrawkcab daer t'nac syug uoy ,tahW .dab oot s'tahT .nuf yllaer si tI .srewsna eht gnidaer tuohtiw od ot tluciffid era sdrowssorc eht neht esuaceb ,nuf sa ton si nwod edispu gnidaeR .eihC ,meop siht ekil yllaer I , reilrae siht noitnem togrof I Pour les gens qui ne peuvent pas lire ces mots, maintennant en francais. Quoi, vous ne pouvez pas lire vers l'arrière? C'est dommage. C'est vraiment amusant. La lecture a l'envers n'est pas comme amusant parce qu'alors il est difficile faire les mots croise sans lire les reponses. J'ai oublie dire cela plus tot, Je vraiment aime cette poeme, Chie.
RE: puff By: Zares Kurtoga on 4/17/2002; 3:57 PM I can read backwards ..What bout backwards french?
RE: puff By: Richard Davidson on 4/17/2002; 7:08 PM Reading backwards is no big deal. Driving a car backwards is big deal. Reading backwards while driving a car backwards? Now that's a big deal.
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