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When the world showed me nothing but sadness and fear
And I'd lost all the hope that my Prince would appear,
I was fought for and vied for and named as a prize
In a plot to gain power through deceit and lies.



One lust-maddened Victor thought I was his to strike – 
He found himself beat with a thin wooden pike.
You challenged him, battled him, his rose tore apart:
By defeating my "master," you captured my heart.



I gave service to you and I made myself yours.
You defended my rights in a series of wars.
Yet even to one who was always always so kind,
No witch would reveal the dark plans in her mind.



You still kept on fighting, the power to claim;
You conquered the council that ruled in His name.
I prayed to my Prince that you'd fall into vice
So I could escape freedom and avoid its harsh price.



But you did not falter, and so with grave heart
I betrayed you and hoped your rose would fall apart.
But that Prince whom I once tried so hard to revive
Put your soul back together and kept you alive.



The power you stole from the Devil's two hands.
With that strength borne of roses, you escaped to new lands.
I accepted the burden that freedom does wreak 
And fled from the tempter, my true prince to seek.



And the thorns of the rose, they do prick at my hand
As I clutch it and trudge through this forgotten land;
But its scent is a promise that cuts through the pain:
That we can be one day together again.






 
  
  

 
                     

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RE: Path of the Rose

By:  Matthew Patterson on 1/12/2002; 1:13 AM




This poem came literally out of nowhere. The last stanza popped into my head exactly as you read it here. I wrote it down and then let it sit for a while. Finally I decided that I ought to actually finish (or rather, begin) the poem. I think it could stand some improving, but for a first go at it I think it's pretty solid. I like the way the meter and rhyme turned out. I'd like to tie in some more references to roses, though, since that's what it's supposed to be *about*. Dueling for the power of roses, the rose leading the two people together, etc. But for now it's good. Suggestions, as always, are welcome.






 
  
  

 
                     

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Re: Path of the Rose

By:  Donna K. on 1/12/2002; 2:17 AM




WOW i love that poem i have a good one that i wrote for my BF, that i

would like to post if u all do not mind?










 
  
  

 
                     

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Re: Path of the Rose

By:  Chie Theresa Fujioka on 1/12/2002; 5:31 AM




oh yes I mind (if you dont post!!). *loves poetry*






 
  
  

 
                     

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RE: Path of the Rose

By:  Dorothy Marie on 1/13/2002; 1:15 AM




It rocks matt.  It simply rocks.  :)  And that's all I have to say on the subject.






 
  
  

 
                     

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RE: Path of the Rose

By:  vanessa on 1/14/2002; 8:01 PM




WOW! thats about the only word i can say to describe this.  i love the beat/meter (i think thats what its called) its soo interesting and kinda has a double meanin, at least for me. love it!






 
  
  

 
                     

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RE: Path of the Rose

By:  lindsay on 1/16/2002; 3:25 PM




i really don't get poetry, but this sounded good, just when i read it in my mind
i thought that it was good.  i'm sure that if i re read it, i would understand 
it.  it has a nice meter/rhyme scheme.  it "flows"
lindsay






 
  
  

 
                     

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