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2 minutes By: Chie Theresa Fujioka on 12/23/2001; 7:07 AM Jeanine turned her lips up with a smirk as she withdrew the smouldering paper tube from her mouth. She tossed her greasily subdued hair, dropping the cigarette to the station floor, and smothered the blossoming black rosebuds floating from the tip with her boot. The dust-blackened green plastic clock suspended from the ceiling read 11:40. In two minutes, the last train would pass through the station, vomiting its hordes of overused women and drunk business men onto the platform. She'd watch as they would crowd into the grimy escalators and stumble through the gates, fumbling with their little magnetic tickets. The night air was brisk and smelled of the coming winter; she hugged herself in an attempt to stay warm, her faux black leather jacket being little protection against the chilly wind. One glance at the outside would show her the same tired scene of neon lights, and semi-deserted roads paving their way into the black gaping mouths between skyscrapers. But she just closed her eyes. Click. 11:41. The black speakers blared out a short jingle before announcing "Mamonaku, ichiban sen ni densha ga mairimasu. Abunai desu kara, kiiroi sen no uchigawa e, osagari kudasai." Soon, a train will come on line number one. Because it is dangerous, please stand behind the yellow line. Life circled the station. In and out, day by day, every kind of people and unpeople imaginable flowed in an everlasting stream by her. Some of them would meet but once. Some would die the next day. Some would get mugged by the person sitting next to them years later. Some of them would spend years on the same commute and never speak. The sado-masochistic chain smokers who hung around the ad-boards would get black lungs. The homeless infinitely slept unregarded on the dirty floor. The cute little girls would still mindlessly speak cruel words to each other. The tough big boys would go home to cry. The young ladies in the fur coats would run into debt at the pachinko parlor. The fragile old women would trample each other in the mad rush to leave. Just last week, she recalled, some man fell flat on the platform and died, making only a temporary dent in the crowd. The only people who noticed were the station conductors who lifted the man away. He was, after all, only one of a million. A small scrap of paper blew across the way, catching desparately on a pillar before being carried off again. Click. 11:4... WHOOSh. Always on time as usual. Time and trains, the only reliable things, never cared for the miniscule molecules of humanity. The doors snapped open. Out staggered her husband. Intoxicated. Across the platform. Off the platform. In the way of an express train. Too drunk to know. But that was years ago, no trains come through now. She turned away.
RE: 2 minutes By: Dorothy Marie on 12/27/2001; 5:28 PM You've done it again. :) I love it!
RE: 2 minutes By: John Edward Lawson on 12/28/2001; 8:18 AM Chie: This is undoubtably strong writing. The descriptions are vivid, you maintain a good pace throughout, and the surprise ending is great! Perhaps the best part is how you examine some dark subject matter objectively, concealing it so well that you force the reader to create her husband's death in their own minds. Then we have to reconcile that the whole beginning wasn't just interesting observations about life, in fact it's a lot tougher reading it the second time around. Keep up the good work!
RE: 2 minutes By: Chie Theresa Fujioka on 12/30/2001; 7:22 AM Click whrrr... chie rotates her head pi over 2 radians counter clockwise in an attempt to understand. thanks (: ... John, methinks it will take me a while to understand your comment... i am justgetting over a cold D: d: Mark or any other capable admin: how dew I get VoU on email?? I want to read from my phone... and the new format wont work on my phone web
Re: 2 minutes By: Matthew Patterson on 12/30/2001; 8:12 AM This option is available under Member Preferences: Settings: Preferences: Conversation Prefs: Email Interface. Should be something that says "Subscribe to this Conversation via Email" with a "yes/no" radio button beside it. _________________________________________________________ Do You Yahoo!? Get your free @yahoo.com address at http://mail.yahoo.com
Re: 2 minutes By: Mark Morgan on 12/30/2001; 8:38 PM Although, this will only work if your phone's e-mail address is the same one you use to log into the site. I'm a little concerned that the site used to work with your phone, but doesn't now. When did it stop working?
Re: 2 minutes By: Chie Theresa Fujioka on 12/31/2001; 3:00 AM when u changed the format and made it more auto the thing was, I was using google to access the site, since normally it is much to big for the phone's display
Re: 2 minutes By: Matthew Patterson on 12/31/2001; 10:05 AM On Sunday, December 30, 2001, at 07:54 , Mark Morgan wrote: > Although, this will only work if your phone's e-mail address is the > same one you use to log into the site. Could just create another account using the phone's email address. _________________________________________________________ Do You Yahoo!? Get your free @yahoo.com address at http://mail.yahoo.com
RE: 2 minutes By: Mark Morgan on 12/31/2001; 11:52 AM --- Matthew Patterson <ptmc14@yahoo.com> wrote: > > On Sunday, December 30, 2001, at 07:54 , Mark Morgan wrote: > > > Although, this will only work if your phone's e-mail address is the > > same one you use to log into the site. > > Could just create another account using the phone's email address. True, if it's read-only. Or Mark could create a phone-friendly discussion group. ===== Mark Morgan: mark_morgan@yahoo.com http://www.VoicesOfUnreason.com "obeisances before the written word" CS Lewis: "We read to know we're not alone." __________________________________________________ Do You Yahoo!? Send your FREE holiday greetings online! http://greetings.yahoo.com
RE: 2 minutes By: Mark Morgan on 12/31/2001; 11:54 AM --- Chie Theresa Fujioka <vaguelyweird@hotmail.com> wrote: > when u changed the format and made it more auto > the thing was, I was using google to access the site, since normally it is much to big > for the phone's display "More auto"? What specificially changed, and what is happening on your phone? ===== Mark Morgan: mark_morgan@yahoo.com http://www.VoicesOfUnreason.com "obeisances before the written word" CS Lewis: "We read to know we're not alone." __________________________________________________ Do You Yahoo!? Send your FREE holiday greetings online! http://greetings.yahoo.com
RE: 2 minutes By: Chie Theresa Fujioka on 1/2/2002; 8:37 AM by the way: Jeanine is a student at my school. I used her name because she exudes the dark gothic type mysterious yada blah blah. i wish you guys could meet her... i think youd agree
RE: 2 minutes By: Mark Morgan on 1/5/2002; 12:13 AM Chie, I'm still curious what exactly happened with your phone?
RE: 2 minutes By: Chie Theresa Fujioka on 1/5/2002; 4:32 AM oops... i started a reply and lost it b/c my computer froze ah yes. When you changed the format of vou to make it more automatic i believe (and started the past 2 weeks style format) i was unable to read anything but code. I think it is with the way that google handles the new script, since I can only view the site through google's proxy server. However, reading on my phone through web is clumsy and laborious. i changed my email address on vou, but i haven't been receiving posts. The more i think of it, however, I'd rather be able to have a format i can read through my phone's web, and submit, without the hassle of email (since a lot of weird stuff gets posted, by myself included). So my final reques, since my other comp is about to be hooked up, and I don't really need to access by phone, is for you to leave things the way they are! (hehe but thanks mark)
RE: 2 minutes By: Mark Morgan on 1/5/2002; 1:13 PM --- Chie Theresa Fujioka <vaguelyweird@jp-t.ne.jp> wrote: >i changed my email address on vou This is going to cause problems. Could you change it back to what it was originally, then? ===== Mark Morgan: mark_morgan@yahoo.com http://www.VoicesOfUnreason.com "obeisances before the written word" CS Lewis: "We read to know we're not alone." __________________________________________________ Do You Yahoo!? Send FREE video emails in Yahoo! Mail! http://promo.yahoo.com/videomail/
RE: 2 minutes By: Chie Theresa Fujioka on 1/6/2002; 12:05 AM *ooh* *enjoys making problems* hehe ok markus
RE: 2 minutes By: tiffany on 8/1/2005; 5:26 AM Really strong and rather confronting. Quite took my fancy. You are extremely talented. I look forward to the next installment. ~Tiffany~
RE: 2 minutes By: Umal Ikram Nasir on 8/17/2005; 6:42 PM Beautiful. I've never read a more avid description of the ordinary things in life which are so hopeless. That reminded me of some parts of my life which have a hint of that kind of despair.
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