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Waterlight
By: Dorothy Marie on 10/21/2001; 4:40 PM

*Back to my traditional poetry*

You
are the only one
who waits for me until I'm done
You
look through my eyes
through my soul like it's stained glass

You
are my light
you see through me in all disguises
Tell me
to be myself because the light can always tell

You
are still here
when no one else wants to stay
-you're my no one-
You
say you're me
looking out into yourself
that's why it's so easy

I am their laundry
washed and hung out to dry when it's raining
at night
Then you come
and shine your light right through me
transparent sheets, hanging on drops of rain
droplets of rain
you've never seen me cry.

Lighthouse
shine to me your light
spinning round for me
waiting
always
waiting
If my seas are rought or calm
you offer up your shore to crash upon
if I like

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RE: Waterlight
By: Chie Theresa Fujioka on 7/25/2001; 1:22 AM

!!!!!!!!!!!!!!


This made me cry!! I love it...

You are the only one who waits for me until I'm done

It means so much when someone does... not impatiently, just there for you!

You look through my eyes through my soul like it's stained glass

Seeing every color, every flaw, every way the light and dark bend and twist through the shadows seeing how you see, feeling how you feel

You are my light you see through me in all disguises Tell me to be myself because the light can always tell

and you can't hide, can you?

You are still here when no one else wants to stay

And you need someone more than ever

-you're my no one-

Suddenly you realize that "you" is not another in "real life" "you" never existed "you" keeps you alive

You say you're me looking out into yourself that's why it's so easy

to understand? to empathize?

I am their laundry washed and hung out to dry when it's raining at night

when everything goes wrong, used by "them" and then left cold, wet, bare, alone and forgotten in the dark with all your own pain

Then you come and shine your light right through me transparent sheets, hanging on drops of rain droplets of rain you've never seen me cry

shining hope, righting the wrong, repairing your heart knowing you through and through

Lighthouse shine to me your light spinning round for me waiting always waiting

Patiently. kindly. invitingly. lovingly.

If my seas are rought or calm you offer up your shore to crash upon

the strong base at which you can lay everything in your life

if i like

sacrificially.



Dot, this must be my all time fav poem of yours... ach. make song make song!


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RE: Waterlight
By: Dorothy Marie on 7/25/2001; 1:25 AM

YOU GOT IT PERFECTLY!

That is EXACTLY it!

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RE: Waterlight
By: Chie Theresa Fujioka on 7/25/2001; 1:41 AM

weIRd!

wOW

COOOL!!!

*hug*

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RE: Waterlight
By: Ginny Davis on 9/8/2001; 3:00 PM

Hey Dot! Great poem. I like all the extended metaphors. Vey cool =)

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