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STERLING By: Kaju Sarkar on 10/21/2001; 5:32 PM This is a song I wrote a long time ago about abusive realtionships after hearing savage garden's two beds and a coffee machine, it's nowhere near that but,it also has different point of view.My song is from the "abuser's soul" if you know what i mean.don't ask me about the sterling part because i have a little personal issue with that.thanks fo' reading -- kaju Havent you ever seen the evil in my eyes? Havent you ever called me from the dead---Ed? Havent you ever seen me on a ride to hell (in a blue and black corvette) ? Havent you called me back from the denizens of the dark? Chorus: Tomorrow will be a lot better I promise, you but will you get through the dark. Life is an everlasting song of the dead; Im so scared that it hasnt fallen apart If you want to catch me when I go down, I suggest you come and turn me around, I am on the brink of darkness, darling, you have to understand, STERLING, Its not your fault but you are responsible----e for it I dont care if you say damn it but you have to pay for it, Some time or the other, someday or the other, To be issued a receipt by the denizens of the dark Chorus: Tomorrow will be a lot better I promise, you but will you get through the dark. Life is an everlasting song of the dead; Im so scared that it hasnt fallen apart Its come to get me, I dont what it is, and its gnawing inside my skin, I dont think I can keep it in much longer, or else I would have to get stronger, This is forbidden anyway. I dont know what rules of conduct we go by! But what ever I do why are you always in sight??? What have I done to do this to you? (INSTRUMENTS KICK IN, KEY CHANGE) Please carry me STERLING to the plains of light darling You are the one for me I know . Chorus: Tomorrow will be a lot better I promise, you but will you get through the dark. Life is an everlasting song of the dead; Im so scared that it hasnt fallen apart REPEAT
RE: STERLING By: Chie Theresa Fujioka on 5/2/2001; 10:17 PM ... get tylenol baby...
RE: STERLING By: Kaju Sarkar on 5/3/2001; 9:14 AM ok chie, stop like right now don't joke about sterling pls. because it's a little personal.and get some tylenol by the way KJS
RE: STERLING By: Evan on 5/7/2001; 8:49 AM Kaju is an idiot who is reading over my shoulder while I try to type a reply to this.
RE: STERLING By: Chie Theresa Fujioka on 5/7/2001; 1:09 PM whatever kaj. im just rather annoyed that you joined b/c you were reading over someones shoulder. It might sound mean, but there are no more kaju-free zones in america. This norwegian pop-singer's hold on our culture is parasitic and soon we will all be chanting with one accord: get tylenol baby!
RE: STERLING By: Kaju Sarkar on 5/7/2001; 4:10 PM "im just rather annoyed that you joined b/c you were reading over someones shoulder" what is the deal about that i was just reading over evan's shoulder what he was writing to my poem.could we cool off with the tylenol a bit please?? it's really getting on my nerves.And by the way, "norwegian pop singer" what in the world ??? i thought we were over that!! it's gone and done with.please stop these .if you are annoyed with me then just don't read my poems.i thought i had a audience to listen to.. as dotK said, "we are going to welcome your poems and writings" *sighs* Respectfully , Kaju Sarkar
RE: STERLING By: Kaju Sarkar on 6/8/2001; 7:31 PM hey anybody got any suggestions on how to get this thing better? I am revising my pieces and need some suggestions... so -GIVE ME SOME Advice> constructive criticism ONLY
RE: STERLING By: Chie Theresa Fujioka on 6/8/2001; 8:37 PM ~drop it like its hot~
RE: STERLING By: Evan on 6/8/2001; 8:43 PM Cover it in cheese. Just about anything is good when its covered with some form of cheese. For this work I would reccommend gorgonzola (sounds like a b movie monster but its a type of cheese) cheese.
RE: STERLING By: Kaju Sarkar on 6/8/2001; 8:53 PM Please guys....Some Useful advice. PLease.....
RE: STERLING By: Evan on 6/8/2001; 10:44 PM I'm afraid there is not much useful I can think to say about it Kaju I know next to nothing about writing songs. I've written one reasonably good song, well I think its good and so did a few other people but I can't give you any really constructive advice. I think music kind of needs to just flow out of you, sort of like a bowel movement when you've had way too much fiber.
RE: STERLING By: Kaju Sarkar on 6/9/2001; 12:18 AM Okay Evan thnaks.. but I'm not talking abbout the music..I am talking about the entire song ..like the structure and everything....so HELP ME IF yuo can.
RE: STERLING By: Evan on 6/9/2001; 8:11 PM Its somewhat difficult to evaluate a song based only upon the lyrics. From what I can tell your choice of words seems to be a bit choppy. It doesn't seem to have a flowing rhythym (acck spelling!!!). I'm not sure exactly what you could do to fix it but that does seem to be the problem as far as I can tell.
RE: STERLING By: Kaju Sarkar on 6/10/2001; 1:30 PM spelling what spelling??
RE: STERLING By: Evan on 6/10/2001; 8:46 PM When I say (ackk!! spelling!!!) it means that I am uncertain of the spelling of the word and am too much of a lazy bum to look it up.
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