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Celeste....The Rebirth By: Gene Santos on 7/19/2003; 10:35 PM i heard a sound from your breaking lips a melody in tuned with the echoes of sliding dawn the sun goes down,,,but your voice still transcending an undefined beauty so heavenly in the making... the night glistens,complementing your grace trinkets of diamonds surrounding your aura the moon breathing above you,,,you look like a saint with your eyes looking down to earth,,,that was once faint... coming down,looks like your falling but the air that surrounds you would not let pain touch you your soles landed on the dwelling earth the piece of ground in your occupancy,,,suddenly grew in rebirth... you started to sing,opening your palm with a prayer written on it with every strand of rythm that's other worldly in the ears of a mortal the grey stones turned to glowing,,,beating hearts... the world in your eyes...you,,,seen in every part...
RE: Celeste....The Rebirth By: youssef bakhouche on 7/26/2003; 6:17 AM nice poem!
RE: Celeste....The Rebirth By: Gene Santos on 7/26/2003; 8:48 PM thanks...(",)
RE: Celeste....The Rebirth By: Dorothy Marie on 7/30/2003; 12:35 AM Beautiful. You made everything, all of her surroundings, seem alive. The moon breathing, the rocks, beating hearts. Everything this being comes in contact with gains new life, or a rebirth. There is too much beauty in this poem to even begin to describe... i love it. The surperfluous commas are a bit confusing, but the words are beautiful. Best line: "the world in your eyes...you,,,seen in every part..." Bravo.
RE: Celeste....The Rebirth By: Gene Santos on 8/2/2003; 8:38 PM thank you dorothy...(",)the superfluous commas are just playin along with the lines... hehehe (",) thanks for the comment (",)
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