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Losing my Adolescence
By: Chie Theresa Fujioka on 7/4/2003; 12:08 PM

Pushing away from dullness
A green spark on the arm of a tree
Burns so quick, just like a match
But green, not yellow, without a flinch
No darkness hollows its heart
And screaming into a blue sky, it fades
The resting calm of a mild yellow
While grey rotting elders decay
Melting into the dark that ends the air
Take notice; burn firey red
With the blood of each witnessed sunset
Before your colour is swept away
By relentless wind and rain

You cannot chose to die. You simply do.

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RE: Losing my Adolescence
By: Richard Davidson on 7/4/2003; 12:24 PM

I'm not sure...

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RE: Losing my Adolescence
By: Chie Theresa Fujioka on 7/4/2003; 12:27 PM

*boggle*

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RE: Losing my Adolescence
By: R.A.B. on 7/7/2003; 9:15 AM

obscenety versus ambiguity? Choose your poison.

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RE: Losing my Adolescence
By: Chie Theresa Fujioka on 7/7/2003; 3:07 PM

it's a leaf posing as a metaphor for life.

metaphor for. That sounds fun.

I write nothing obscene. Or at least publish none of it.

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RE: Losing my Adolescence
By: R.A.B. on 7/7/2003; 7:22 PM

Chie I meant obscenety here as "something that can't be that understandable" due to Richard's comment.

There two classifications of poetry writting based on meaning one is obscenety which takes Nirvana's smells like teen spirit as very good example because almost all metaphors used there are cobain's personal metaphors therefore making the song's meaning quite vague. The other is ambiguity which uses ambigous metaphors that most people can easily relate to.

Anyway sorry bout that ma'am and have a nice day =)

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RE: Losing my Adolescence
By: Richard Davidson on 7/7/2003; 9:32 PM

RAB, just so you know, (and now Chie will know too -thanks a lot!) I wrote my post as a way to express that, although I am a brilliant writer and literary critic, at least compared to someone who can't read, I can't get a handle on the secret imagery Chie has concealed within this poem.

I'm supposed to visualize something, like that excellent coffee poem, but my mind is a blank; what the Buddhists would correctly call "the uncarved block."

I wanted to express that, but I wanted to do it subtly, and with kind of an original edge to it.

You have ruined it forever, and that means you owe me money.

I'm going to want quite a bit of money, too, as I am quite broke. Gold is fine, or US Dollars, preferably in a Swiss Bank Account.

Let me know on this.

I eagerly await your reply, and first payment.

Yes, Chie, you will get your cut.

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RE: Losing my Adolescence
By: Chie Theresa Fujioka on 7/8/2003; 12:03 AM

Surely you mean obscure?

Good, richard, I was about to ask. But would you do me the favor of converting that into high quality dark chocolate? Dark Ghiradelli will do, if that's hard to find.

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RE: Losing my Adolescence
By: R.A.B. on 7/8/2003; 7:05 AM

oh yeah sorry hehehe

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