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From This Window By: Rachelle King on 4/29/2003; 2:53 PM Dodging alleyways dart as vision becomes stimulated, distracted by neon shimmers fastened to adult theme parks Lego Blocks: plastic dominance of fad factory made boxed and sold suitable trades: from as far back as 10 decades ago swallowing my skyline. Bridges like spokes in time's wheel jut out. Motion cascades over these arched backs, Sewn neighborhoods squabble about defective parts of the whole Dr. Victor F. couldn't be happier over this patchwork quilt simmering tonight like black coal. [This piece is a work in progress. Any suggestions, comments, etc.?]
RE: From This Window By: Daryl Del Rosario on 3/28/2003; 4:45 AM So you're looking at memory lane?
RE: From This Window By: R.A.B. on 3/28/2003; 6:30 AM Imageries are great. Keep it up.
RE: From This Window By: Ben C on 3/28/2003; 2:35 PM i'm not a fan of the lego block part, sorry, but gotta be honest
RE: From This Window By: R.A.B. on 3/28/2003; 7:04 PM Legos are fun. Legos can almost make anything.
RE: From This Window By: Richard Davidson on 3/28/2003; 11:41 PM It's almost like the city and the memories of your life are having sex with each other, and I'm not talking about cheap, dirty sex, either; there's wine, and soft lights, and really really groovy music playing. It's Al Green. He's singing "Let's Stay Together." It's an extended version, with about a 15 minute saxaphone solo. I want a line about Lego blocks and the city, and their relationship to each other, and for it to be sort of vague... I have a couple ideas, but I won't give them to you, as it would destroy the artistic integrity of your poem. Instead, merely take my suggestion, and lace it with your own vision, and create such a line. Let the line write itself. It's there, just waiting for someone to have the courage to breathe life into it. I hope this was helpful.
RE: From This Window By: Rachelle King on 3/31/2003; 1:47 AM Daryl Del Rosario wrote: So you're looking at memory lane? Naw, just out my window. I live downtown. Richard, that is a very good suggestion, and for obvious reasons, I now see why I must be more explanative with the Lego Blaocks description (ops, I think I feel that fire in my belly burning).
RE: From This Window By: Rachelle King on 4/2/2003; 1:38 AM new version: check it out.
RE: From This Window By: R.A.B. on 4/2/2003; 1:46 AM much better.
RE: From This Window By: Rachelle King on 4/29/2003; 2:51 PM okay all, this is the last version, I sware.
RE: From This Window By: Richard Davidson on 6/4/2003; 6:47 PM I can't believe I missed this! I don't have the old version that I commented on above to reference, but this is excellent. I hope it is the final version, because it seems to work.
RE: From This Window By: Sandy Watson on 6/6/2003; 11:02 AM I agree with Ben C about using the Lego imagery, it's a kinda old and cliched way to describe tower blocks and modern cities, but sometimes cliches can work I guess. I just TRY (not always succesfully of course) to avoid them. However, I loved: "Bridges like spokes in time's wheel jut out". Wonderful imagery.
RE: From This Window By: Richard Davidson on 6/6/2003; 6:48 PM I still like the Lego's. If I had some here, I'd build something.
RE: From This Window By: Sandy Watson on 6/7/2003; 8:51 PM Richard liked Lego. He said if he had some hed build something. So we all brought our own. Mine were orange and small and in a tattered box from my youth. Richard found some of the big bright yellow bricks and smiled widely. Someone had the big kit with roofing tiles and furniture. I made a cliché. After all, theyre built to last. They stand the test of time and they dont need roofs either.
RE: From This Window By: Richard Davidson on 6/7/2003; 10:48 AM That's fine, but I still disagree that the Lego analogy is a cliche. That's like saying love is a cliche. God knows, millions of poets and wannabe poets have written about it.
RE: From This Window By: Ben C on 6/7/2003; 5:30 PM I'm Convinced There Should Be A List Of Poets And Wannabe Poets, But Who Would Make Such A List?
RE: From This Window By: Sandy Watson on 6/7/2003; 8:54 PM Hmmm...I wouldn't say that love is a cliche, I think it's the over-used analagies used to describe it that become cliched, not love itself. It's the job of us word lovers to work on original ways of describing the world and expressing feelings/emotions, etc... Anyways...I was thinking that maybe the whole Lego/Cliche issue is an English thing. We have little estates over here in the UK built by companies called "Barratt Homes" and "Beech Homes" and lots of people have nicknamed them Lego Estates over the years... *Shrugs* However, after all that, I'm about to quote an old jaded phrase myself. "VARIETY IS THE SPICE OF LIFE!" Some liked the Lego buildings and I loved the jutting, spokey, bridges! So all is well and life is spicey! ;o)
RE: From This Window By: Richard Davidson on 6/7/2003; 10:49 PM AHA!!! So you admit it's one of those "It's a British Thing; You Wouldn't Understand," kind of problems! Well, let me tell you, I've grown up Scottish all my life, and thank God it was here in the good old USA, but even that didn't stop me from watching Benny Hill and Monty Python. If only it had, perhaps there would've been a chance, but alas, it was not to be. Nay, instead, good gentry, I haved lived the life of the ne'er do well highwayman, planting apple trees wherever mankind has a chance to grow caramel, and sending postcards to strangers in cities I'll never see, wondering why no one writes back. (I'm superstitious, and believe return addresses are bad luck.) I'd rather be dragged through a vat of week old Hormel chili than wear a kilt, or eat Haggis, but I do fancy a wee bit of Fish & Chips now and then. Usually, intense drug therapy can settle me out of Scottish behavior in a jiffy. You don't have to worry about me tuning in to watch Cricket, or Soccer either, for that matter, and the thought of room-temperature beer the color of coffee makes my stomach churn. I do enjoy English Invasion bands, particularly the Beatles, Stones, Grateful Dead, and Doors. That's a joke. Everybody knows the Stones weren't really British. They are now, though, and that's quite the feat. Becoming British is an Art Form I'd sooner leave behind, but for those who are inclined, with a little training, patience, and some serious connections, you may have a chance. As for city buildings looking like Lego's, I'd never heard it before in my life, honest. And I DO read, you know.
RE: From This Window By: Ben C on 6/8/2003; 10:00 PM I wouldn't want my opinion to get lumped in with others, so I think I'll re-establish what I thought to originally say. When I addressed the lego block issue, I meant merely to point out that in my unintelligent and unexperienced opinion, that the lego blocks line generally didn't flow well with the rest of the poem. I would agree that I have never heard of buildings being described as lego blocks, indeed this poem might have been the first. All this gets me to thinking, all those corporate biggies and billionaire-o-s, what are they fighting for? I mean really... what motivates them so? Their big buildings? That must be it, cause I can't see anything else worth fighting for, besides money... and I mean, if money isn't a cliche, then what is.
RE: From This Window By: Richard Davidson on 6/9/2003; 8:24 PM Ben, what they're fighting for is mostly imaginary. Power; class; history; legacy; that sort of thing. As you fall under the influence of power, the sycophants and potential thieves all band together, and tell you the world is whatever your sick mind wants, or believes it to be. Slowly, you see this world as real, and lose touch with truth, replacing it with those fantasies that live strongest within your psyche. As you are entombed in your make believe world, you feel the dread pull of Death, and all you can really use as an excuse for actual life is to have buildings and parks named after you; and perhaps have some people killed in your name. That's probably kind of a cynical way of looking at it, but I'd LOVE to see a coherent argument to anything I just said.
RE: From This Window By: Rachelle King on 10/19/2003; 10:46 PM Guess I should stop by here more often and put my two cents in, eh? Sandy: I have never heard buildings described as lego blocks, or I prolly would not have refered to them as so in this piece. I have this thing about attempting to be as innovative as possible, as do, I suppose, all writers. Maybe If I explain more about why I chose these words specifically to describe the downtown area of San Diego, it will put it into context for you. When I was a child, San Diego was much smaller and underdeveloped. Fifteen years later, San Diego has mutated into a nightmarish entity of stucco and asphalt. Cranes, wooden planks, and the smell of tar litters the skyways. From my window, I can see a hill cluttered with justaposed buildings and they remind me of lego blocks because they are all so different. They are all a result of different times. They are all the result of a childish ambition to outdo. Hope that helps put it into perspective.
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