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Going with that Depressing Theme... By: Richard Davidson on 3/11/2003; 9:47 PM Why has life left me stiff and betrayed Spent, cold, broken A mere nasty stain on this wall My skull impaled by the bone of a rat To such musty, fetid stone My soul, stretched, burning in places Across the gates of Hell Not in, and not out, and yet both My heart impaled by the bloody dagger Of loves first, sweet kiss Why do crowds gather and laugh And mouth gentle obscenities How funny I must be Stretched out, screaming here, bleeding What dangerous farce! Ha ha! My feet, no longer attached to my legs Will be dancing Ill whistle a merry tune My last breath, a cheap entertainment For any so brave as to watch Ill laugh at Death, and his sister And his momma too, by God Ill go gladly, willingly through those doors Into darkness, still and final Its gotta be better than this place
RE: Going with that Depressing Theme... By: Ben C on 3/11/2003; 10:39 PM Hmm. I liked it. When I say that, I mean it literally. Had I read this two weeks ago, I would've really liked it. Two weeks ago, I was teenaged still, and thus had mounds of angst that generally pointed in that direction. Now I am twenny. I guess, I'm not a fan of this poem, for 3 main reasons: 1) "Dangerous farce!" the "Ha ha!" kicks some ass, I can even envision you doing that, but if you were to change what pre-empts it (dangerous farce), even in its wording, I would love you more for it. However I doubt this is possible. 2) You stole "merry tune", from one of my poems. It is obvious. 3) I basically don't agree with you. You haven't convinced me that Hell is better. I think it is not. I would argue very strongly that it is about 111 times worse than anything you've ever heard of happening to someone else, and about 111 000 times worse than anything that's ever happened to you, and about 111 000 000 times worse than anything that's ever happened to me. Hell sucks man. Deal with it. If you were ever invited, I bet you'd be dragged kicking and screaming shakespearean obscenities through the gates, not laughing like an 18th century comedian/jester. ------ Sorry for rambling. This poem is good. But that doesn't mean I have to like it. By the way, are you on the internet and chatting? I'd like to talk to you about somethings. I need advice on romance and I think you know what you're talking about. Tell me to fuck off if you don't feel like it though. ben
RE: Going with that Depressing Theme... By: R.A.B. on 3/12/2003; 5:20 AM So I've persuaded one of the joyful personalities in this site to join my exploits to the void of depression. Mwaahahahahahaha...the apocalypse has begun...mwahahahaha...ooof! *choking on bread*
RE: Going with that Depressing Theme... By: Richard Davidson on 3/12/2003; 5:43 PM Actually, I just saw a lot of depressing poems appear lately, which made me think I should write one. I never get depressed. People my age shouldn't. We're too damn busy! Ben, I can give you advice for ALL romantic problems, with one simple answer: Do what your heart tells you to do, regardless of what others tell you. At 20, romance shouldn't be the most important part of your life. You're nowhere NEAR ready for serious commitment, so you should have fun, and treat others with respect. I'm not kidding, or being trite, it's true. Sorry, I don't chat. I just can't. Too much time wasted. I will gladly answer any questions you have right here, but what I said above should cover just about everything. Good luck, and remember: Things that damn near DESTROYED me when I was 20 just seem kind of funny now. My beautiful, sexy wife says the same thing. We married three days after my 38th birthday.
RE: Going with that Depressing Theme... By: damnthree on 3/17/2003; 2:12 PM Ei...who's the sister of Death???and his momma?? ummm... i'd like to put a name on that!!! let me think... or maybe you should be the one to name it!!! what do you think?? Too much of that..Anyways...nice poem!!! vividly described!!! by the way Richard Davidson i like this line "My skull impaled by the bone of a rat"
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